tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320080607016581524.post7897878917691026999..comments2024-03-28T15:09:21.698-04:00Comments on The Miss Rumphius Effect: Monday Poetry Stretch - AcrosticsTriciahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/18350907653629775293noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320080607016581524.post-15596203554554181142009-07-02T09:17:20.775-04:002009-07-02T09:17:20.775-04:00Almost forgot--I did a quick one yesterday, too:
...Almost forgot--I did a quick one yesterday, too:<br /><br />The Best Place to Be…<br /><br />Lost<br />Inside<br />Books,<br />Reaching,<br />Asking,<br />Reading,<br />Immersed in<br />Every<br />Story<br /><br />--Laura Purdie Salas, all rights reservedlaurasalashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13807781795919555208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320080607016581524.post-3659438877806542142009-07-02T09:15:45.473-04:002009-07-02T09:15:45.473-04:00Love the poems so far! The "bleak, black heav...Love the poems so far! The "bleak, black heaven" in Jane's, the "Each year, I hear their green rebellion" in Julie's, and "Senses have their own symptoms" in Tess' are some of my favorite lines.<br /><br />Here's my try. I was going to post a previously written one, but felt too guilty, so here's a new one--today's daily poem:>)<br /><br />laurasalashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13807781795919555208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320080607016581524.post-60129081453020279432009-07-02T09:13:10.839-04:002009-07-02T09:13:10.839-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.laurasalashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13807781795919555208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320080607016581524.post-77274848517323433892009-07-02T05:30:04.585-04:002009-07-02T05:30:04.585-04:00Wow, thanks Tiel.
JaneWow, thanks Tiel.<br /><br />Janejaneyolenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15396863710083180775noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320080607016581524.post-49280168331223119982009-07-01T19:25:05.007-04:002009-07-01T19:25:05.007-04:00And I got interested in Jane's poem, so I repo...And I got interested in Jane's poem, so I reposted it with an image... <a href="http://knockingfrominside.blogspot.com/2009/07/undertaker-illo.html" rel="nofollow">here</a>Tiel Aisha Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03994169558252043919noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320080607016581524.post-6848012011363952082009-07-01T12:19:27.408-04:002009-07-01T12:19:27.408-04:00Mine is up at AzanMine is up at <a href="http://knockingfrominside.blogspot.com/2009/07/azan_01.html" rel="nofollow">Azan</a>Tiel Aisha Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03994169558252043919noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320080607016581524.post-90708963842094893682009-06-30T19:58:03.191-04:002009-06-30T19:58:03.191-04:00One more try....
Senses have their own symptoms.
...One more try....<br /><br />Senses have their own symptoms.<br />You may experience or<br />Not experience<br />A sense perception that switches.<br />Even<br />Senses that are<br />Tactile such as your <br />hand, you may just hear it.<br />Estuaries can<br />Slide sideways suddenly<br />Into intuitive structures,into<br />Almost anything -- your salted lip!tesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14651702526007175517noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320080607016581524.post-77314096931262826392009-06-30T18:29:31.103-04:002009-06-30T18:29:31.103-04:00Some sense have their own symptoms.
You may experi...Some sense have their own symptoms.<br />You may experience or<br />Not experience<br />A sense perception that switches.<br />Even<br />Senses that are<br />Tactile such as your hand, You Hear it, right?<br />Estuaries can<br />Slide sideways suddenly<br />Into intuitive structures,into<br />Almost anything -- your lip!<br /><br /><br />Ha, ha... this changed drastically due to the "tesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14651702526007175517noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320080607016581524.post-55394924187883342152009-06-30T04:09:53.456-04:002009-06-30T04:09:53.456-04:00Lovely, lovely, Julie--
green rebellion YES!
Spea...Lovely, lovely, Julie--<br />green rebellion YES!<br /><br />Speaking of revisions (isn't it hard to let go?):<br /><br />Undertaker<br /><br /><br />Victim look up.<br />Under a low and<br />Lowering sky, the undertaker comes<br />To carry your particulars<br />Up to a bleak, black heaven.<br />Read the set of wings, cruel beak, hooded eyes. This is no<br />Easing into eternity but a short, janeyolenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15396863710083180775noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320080607016581524.post-79102553907551592362009-06-30T03:00:35.363-04:002009-06-30T03:00:35.363-04:00Ah, there's a typo. The name of the narcissus ...Ah, there's a typo. The name of the narcissus is Polar Ice, not Polar White. If poets weren't obsessive/compulsive, I could let it go, but I can't. And I don't like the line that says "the bare maple's red leaves." Strike the red leaves. Just "under the bare maple." <br /><br />I know, you really need people posting revisions, right? I read once that PierreJulie https://www.blogger.com/profile/12811523890920763782noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320080607016581524.post-67197676491332889552009-06-30T02:45:46.862-04:002009-06-30T02:45:46.862-04:00P.S. Meant to say, as usual but even more so this ...P.S. Meant to say, as usual but even more so this week, Jane, nice poem! Love that low/lowering, and the bleak, black heaven, and ouch, those "particulars."Julie https://www.blogger.com/profile/12811523890920763782noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320080607016581524.post-57846241051738090762009-06-30T02:41:24.331-04:002009-06-30T02:41:24.331-04:00Tricia, I really have to thank you for getting me ...Tricia, I really have to thank you for getting me in a poetry mood each week with your Stretches. Here's my contribution. I'd post it over at <a href="http://julielarios.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow">The Drift Record</a> but I just posted something else there tonight and want it up for awhile. Hope the longer lines don't wrap - that would be fairly pointless for an acrostic! <br /><br Julie https://www.blogger.com/profile/12811523890920763782noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7320080607016581524.post-33499705749797464592009-06-29T14:07:01.941-04:002009-06-29T14:07:01.941-04:00Undertaker
Victim look up.
Under a low and
Loweri...Undertaker<br /><br />Victim look up.<br />Under a low and<br />Lowering sky, the vulture comes<br />To carry your particulars<br />Up to a bleak, black heaven.<br />Read the set of his wings, the cruel beak, the hooded eyes. This is no<br />Easing into eternity but a short, sharp shock.janeyolenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15396863710083180775noreply@blogger.com