During the summer we wrote climbing rhymes. I thought this form was very interesting, and think we should try it again.
In a poem written in climbing rhyme, the position of the rhyming word changes. It first appears in the 4th word of line 1, 3rd word of line 2, and 2nd word of line 3. The pattern continues as a new rhyme appears in the 4th word of line 3, the 3rd word of line 4, and the 2nd word of line 5. This continues on and on, giving a stair-step feel to the poem.
Here's the poem I wrote for the last challenge.
Here's the poem I wrote for the last challenge.
Skipping, Skipping, SkippingI can think of many topics at this time of year that may work nicely in this scheme. What will you write about? Leave me a comment about your poem and I'll post the results here later this week. Happy writing!
Round, flat, perfect stones,
Mother Nature hones smooth.
Sedimentary bones that skip
the surface, flip then
finally dip from sight.
This was interesting to try. Forces true compression.
ReplyDeleteNearing Winter
The bare boned trees
Bereft of bees, birds,
Welcomes freeze with limbs
Raised, sings hymns as
Light dims, throwing shade.
--Jane Yolen
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ReplyDeleteI had to delete that last post because I didn't read the rules carefully. Went a bit wild, as I'm prone to do.
ReplyDeleteHere's the rule-follower:
Heard Over the P.A. System at the Mall
Placido Domingo singing White
Christmas? Not right, not
Bing-ish. Politely tell him:
Time to trim your
repertoire, flim-flam man,
humbugger. You can’t sing
Crosby. Banned. Prohibido, Placido.
That a tough form to end - it just keeps going....so I chimed the end.
If anyone wants to see the unruly adaptation, it's over at The Drift Record
Yeah, Julie--I realized it would go on and on if you let it. Luckily, I was working on mine at night in bed and was just too danged sleepy to go on.
ReplyDeleteLove your poem,though being neither a Crosby or a Placido fan might have missed something.
Jane
Jane - I loved your poem, too (nice to know you were toasty warm while writing it!)You also tied it up with a chime - raised/shade - very naturally & gracefully.
ReplyDeleteFor those of you interested in a surreal experience, try watching this YouTube video of a young Placido Domingo singing (shouting?) White Christmas. His white 3-piece suit seems to be the stand-in for snow, as he walks among the broad-leaved banana trees and Spanish arches! Here's the link:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JKyW4xybsmw
Song of the Discount Scarf Weaver
ReplyDeleteWhen warping the weft
I'm often left with
A cleft among thread.
Wind in said gap
Your head may freeze
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Here's my second climbing rhyme man in my mind - thanks for introducing me to this intriguing form...
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