I suppose my problem with this challenge was that Nelson's poem really hit me in the heart and I found myself wondering if the event described actually happened to her. That got me stuck thinking that this poem had to be about something that happened to me. And that assumption made it hard. And I got stuck. And I wrote a sappy/crappy poem. It happens. A LOT! I write crap and revise. It gets better (or not), and I write more. Yes, writing is truly a recursive process.
Funny, but my brain is recursive too. Once I get an idea in my head, sometimes I can't shake it and I come back to it over, and over, and over. I spent a lot of time trying to think about minor miracles I had seen or experienced. I finally hit upon a topic when I was watching a show on Netflix and saw a brief scene that jogged a bittersweet memory. I like this one much better than the first poem I wrote. I hope my sisters do too. And of course, I hope you enjoy it as well. This one's for my dad.
I Saw a Father Kiss the Bride
Which reminds me of my wedding day
and my mother's whispered admonition
to my father as we headed for the car
"You'd better kiss her when you
hand her off."
We stood in the back of the church
silently waiting for the music to begin
He offered his arm
but no compliments
no smiles, no words at all
I should not have been disappointed
I knew he was a man of few words
and fewer gestures
When we reached the altar
he pushed me toward my
future husband, shook his hand
and returned to my mother
Leaving the church we were
greeted by a post-shower sky
sporting a double rainbow
the perfect metaphor for my mood
Years passed
There were the obligatory hugs
(I gave them) when we visited
rare smiles at his grandson
the same dry wit and stubbornness
During my last visit
before he died
he harrumphed every time
I fussed over him
too weak to deny my ministrations
but not too weak to
plant a kiss on my cheek
and say goodbye
Poem ©Tricia Stohr-Hunt, 2019. All rights reserved.
You can read the pieces written by my poetry sisters at the links below. Kelly's off playing the most favorite auntie, but she'll be back with us soon. And finally, we're thrilled to welcome in Sara's daughter Rebecca to our little ring of poetry for these prompts.
I do hope you'll take some time to check out all the wonderful poetic things being shared and collected today by Tabatha Yeatts at The Opposite of Indifference. Happy poetry Friday friends!
This is beautiful, Tricia, and I think you've captured Nelson's style of plain telling filled with emotion. The pain (and understanding) is exquisite in your line:
ReplyDelete"There were the obligatory hugs
(I gave them)
Well done.
Tricia, the last line of your poem created a lump in my throat. So poignant. Thank you for sharing!
ReplyDeleteThis brings on the tears! Definitely a miracle, the way love reaches across our chasms. Sometimes the closest ones are the deepest. Well done.
ReplyDeleteAh.
ReplyDeleteThis ...just strikes to the heart. This is fathers from a certain era, mine included, only mine is still here, harumphing... but learning to better bear the beams of love, as William Blake put it. Beautiful.
And we are put on earth a little space,
That we may learn to bear the beams of love...
Oh, Tricia, this makes me so sad for your dad. My dad is much the same way, though my mom's cancer made him (for several years, anyway), more able to share his emotions. The delay makes that last kiss all the sweeter. Hugs to you...
ReplyDeleteYou matched Nelson's style perfectly, saving the gut punch for the ending.
ReplyDeleteYour poem made me remember saying my last goodbye to my father. He gave me a rare kiss, and even rarer, his eyes filled with tears.
You expressed this poignant memory beautifully. As T said, it strikes the heart.
ReplyDeleteIt's not easy to write from the heart & you did, Trisha, so wonderfully. I do wonder about men's feelings hidden so, a learned thing? Afraid of harsh judgement? I don't know, but it feels like your dad wanted that last chance & you & he took it. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteTricia, this is such a poignant poem with the sweet miracle coming at the very end. Well done!
ReplyDeleteOh, Tricia, that ending. My heat!
ReplyDeleteI think you came most closely of all of us to mirroring the tone and the twist....
this is lovely.
Nelson's poem hit me in the heart, too, and reading the Poetry Sisters' various takes on it feels like a gift to me on this Friday evening. Your final lines ... oof. Got me.
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