The challenge this week was to write a climbing rhyme, or poem in which the position of the rhyming word changes from line to line. Here are the results.
Jane Yolen stopped by to share this poem.Here are the poems I wrote this week. I'm sharing two variations on the squirrel theme. Let me know which you like better.Nearing Winter
Julie Larios from The Drift Record wrote two poems! The first strictly follows the structure of climbing rhymes and is called Heard Over the P.A. System at the Mall. The second poem uses the 4/3/2 rhyme position in separate 3-line stanzas. It is entitled Christmas.
The bare boned trees
Bereft of bees, birds,
Welcomes freeze with limbs
Raised, sings hymns as
Light dims, throwing shade.
Sam left this poem in the comments.Song of the Discount Scarf Weaver
lirone from Words that sing shares a poem entitled Man in my mind.
When warping the weft
I'm often left with
A cleft among thread.
Wind in said gap
Your head may freeze
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sales policies. No refunds.douglas florian from Florian Cafe (check out the new banner on his blog!) stopped by to share this poem.Winter Night
TadMack from Finding Wonderland left this poem in the comments.
The squirrels all climb
In hurried time all
While I'm warm, snug
As a bug and
Mom hugs me twice-
That feels nice, as
House mice kiss-Bliss!Tough, terse, family life:
Laura Purdie Salas is fretting along with many others about the state of publishing in these tough economic times. Her poem is entitled Resignations, Restructuring, Layoffs, and Buyouts.
You endure strife, scenes,
Weekends rife with rages...
Spiked pressure gauges screech!
Turning pages, breathing, steam
Releases. You dream "somedays"
Where clean calm reigns,
Sans family strain, tensions
Drain.
cloudscome from a wrung sponge shares a poem entitled End of the Day.
Delicate flakes of laceIt's not too late if you still want to play. Leave me a note about your poem and I'll add it to the list.
twirl through space to
swiftly erase fall’s last
canvas. Dancing fast across
fields vast and stark,
heralding the dark days
that mark the long
song of winter.
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Dashing up and down
the leafless crown and
scarred brown bark, spry
bushy tails cry for
winter’s nigh again. Sigh.
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Dashing up and down
the leafless crown of
squirrel town—pitter patter,
run skitter scatter, they
loudly chatter 'bout acorns.
Hi tricia, I'm going to try a climbing rhyme that starts with a climb, and also has squirrels near rhyming hurried and a kiss bliss rhyme ending.
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The squirrels all climb
In hurried time all
While I'm warm, snug
As a bug and
Mom hugs me twice-
That feels nice, as
House mice kiss-Bliss!
Loved the clever double climb in 'Delicate flakes of lace...'
ReplyDeleteWell done, you!
It's a challenge to write a climbing rhyme with meaning -- forcing depth into structure usually doesn't work for me. I'm still not sure if this works without coming off as either too dramatic or too trite, but I've just realized I've been fiddling with this for TWO HOURS now. Good grief.
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Tough, terse, family life:
You endure strife, scenes,
Weekends rife with rages...
Spiked pressure gauges screech!
Turning pages, breathing, steam
Releases. You dream "somedays"
Where clean calm reigns,
Sans family strain, tensions
Drain.
I did a climbing rhyme this morning--nothing lovely like the ones shared here, but definitely a timely one: http://laurasalas.livejournal.com/115010.html
ReplyDeleteTanita, yours totally spoke to me. That is my life. Thank you for writing it.
Wow--Jane Yolen started out with a bang--stunning. I'm off to feed the kids breakfast, and then I'll be back to properly read the others.
Wow, Laura.
ReplyDeleteYou said yours wasn't lovely like all the rest, and that's what I thought of mine.
Thank you.
These are really fabulous!! I am so stunned to read them all on what is a very grey day over here. I'm doing one for Friday Poetry, posting tomorrow morning. Thanks for the challenge and the inspiring company!
ReplyDeleteOh thank you thank you for rounding-up all this good reading.
ReplyDeleteWhat a fine bunch of contributions!
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